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Mom, Where were you?

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Mom, Where were you?
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Mommy where were you when
I got my first A?
Made my first friend?
Got ready for picture day and daddy had to do my hair in long twists and curly bangs?
When I was repeatedly bullied in school and you did nothing about it?
When I was playing in a school concert for band and I gave you, grandma, and dad tickets to see?
When I brought home awards from my middle school graduation?

Mom where were you when
I started becoming a young lady?
When I got my first job?
Needed motherly advice on dating and boys?
Went off to prom?
When I got accepted to college?
When my life spiraled out of control cause of my depression and you and dad were getting divorced?
When I made everyone proud at my high school graduation?

My past life experiences were important things that you missed and
will never get back.
As I continue to mature and live through life,
You will keep on missing the important memorable things that are yet to come
College graduations
Weddings
Childbirths
Where will you be by then?
Where are you now, mother…?

By: Punx-chan89
Date: 1/04/2013
I decided to write this poem about my mother and emotions I bottled up for a long time about her after my family's home life fell apart due of a lot of things she had done in the past and things she had missed since she been out of my life.

I would like some comments and critiques about the poem on how to better improve it. Maybe fix the line structure or even substitute some words. Or even spacing or font to add some emphasis to the emotions I'm trying to convey.

Hope you guys like
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sgtsennep's avatar
Jesus this is really powerful stuff.